Very good. My money would be on Snape being the father. I'm keeping my fingers crossed for that and Draco being Ginny's mate.

hehehe I guess we just have to wait and see....

what an interesting concept! i like that it was ginny being adopted by the weasleys and not one of the scoobies being taken from a wizarding family! can't wait to see what happens next.....

thank you for your comment, I hope that you will like to next chapter....

I suggest you wait until you find a beta, have you checked the fourms on this site and others? You will more than likely lose readers if you post your work unbetad.
Best of luck, keep writing. :D

Thank you for suggestion, I got a beta now. I did check the forums but now every fine. :)

Interesting.

I hope the story will stay interesting for you as I continues to writing....thank you for your review

It's an interesting idea but the story definitely needs working on. There were far too many spelling and (mostly) grammatical errors.

I hope to fix all these problem soon.......just want to say thank you for your review

Ginny's full name isn't Virginia; it's Ginevra.

Thank you for point it out, I will fix it right now.

This story is worth developing further. You either need to have a true disclaimer about English not being your first language or go over the chapters for typoes and grammatical problems. If you decide to revise or expand any of the chapters, while you're at it, this may also improve the storytelling.

The emotional core of the story works. I think the "what if" timing might be that Jessie is the father and maybe Willow got pregant when she was 13 or 14? Younger? Could it have been a violence situation if not Jessie?


Also, while you're at it, I think Ginny has been revealed to be short for Ginevra (sp?). Check an on-line Harry Potter resource for that one.

So overall-- you have the beginnings of something. You can polish what you have, or revise and expand the story and scenes it to make it more of something. Thanks for sharing your efforts.

You're right about english is my second language and my worst subject. :( I will try and find a beta soon.

As for the father, well it not Jessie......=)

I just want to say thank you for your review and also for point out my mistake on Ginny name.

I hope my writing improve as I continues.