Review of chapter "Dreams" from
BoosterReview:
*snerk* The Cheeseman rules all. Great fun, Don.
Review By [
Booster] • Date [15 Nov 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dreams" from
MariReview:
You know, pretty much anything that has apppropriate use of the Cheese Man has my approval. He's just so . . . random.
I liked the touch about nightmares, too. Lilly was very much an in-the-moment person. AFter I read that bit, that was something that just clicked and made sense.
Review By [
Mari] • Date [15 Nov 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dreams" from
MarcusRowlandReview:
Yay the cheese man!
Review By [
MarcusRowland] • Date [15 Nov 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Above the Fold" from
CPTSkipReview:
Excellent work! I always liked the chemistry between V and L in the flashbacks on the show. I hope we can see the two fight off the rest of the world together. I think V would make a great Watcher. BTW, does V's mom still run off? Just wondering.
Review By [
CPTSkip] • Date [9 Nov 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Above the Fold" from
littleoldmeReview:
You're jumping around between present and past tense quite a bit. I'm enjoying the plot, but the super short chapters make the story ultra choppy. I think another format would probably serve you better.
Comments from author:
I fixed the verb tenses.
Having each chapter be a 100 word drabble is something I'm trying out, since Marcus started this with a drabble.
Review By [
littleoldme] • Date [9 Nov 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Above the Fold" from
DaveTurnerReview:
Interesting way on writing...short chapters an' such.
I hope you finish this story as it looks as if it could be really good. I will keep a look out for more.
One of these days I'm going to have to buy the first season of Veronica Mars. It's never been on TV or on a channel I've got where I live.
All the Best,
DaveT.
Review By [
DaveTurner] • Date [9 Nov 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Beginning the Investigation" from
MariReview:
I'm glad you decided to continue the bit MR started. Should be interesting, but tough, maybe? I think Lily is probably one of those characters easier to like when she's dead.
Oops. I'm sorry. My computer and I bickered. It obviously won, and I accidently double-posted. This was not meant as an extra post to emphasize my opinion on how difficult it is to make Lily both entertaining, likeable, and in-character.
Review By [
Mari] • Date [21 Oct 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Beginning the Investigation" from
MariReview:
I'm glad you decided to continue the bit MR started. Should be interesting, but tough, maybe? I think Lily is probably one of those characters easier to like when she's dead.
Review By [
Mari] • Date [21 Oct 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Beginning the Investigation" from
CPTSkipReview:
That Keith is one smart cookie. But I wonder what he would make of Lily becoming a Slayer. ;-)
Review By [
CPTSkip] • Date [19 Oct 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Covering it Up" from
CPTSkipReview:
Boy, somehow I missed this. Excellent continuation of Marcus' drabble. I would love to see more. Hint, hint anyone?
Review By [
CPTSkip] • Date [18 Oct 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Covering it Up" from
BrendanMReview:
Nice.
That's our 'Ronnie!
Two thumbs up!
Review By [
BrendanM] • Date [17 Oct 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Covering it Up" from
MarcusRowlandReview:
Nice to see someone take up the challenge. Many thanks! Be interesting to see where this goes.
Review By [
MarcusRowland] • Date [17 Oct 06] • Not Rated
