Its a wonderful story. And I would love a couple more chapters. It doesn't have to be any big action scenes. Maybe a bit like a Gilmore show, with the ending having Buffy/Joyce tell and show the Gilmore girls that Buffy is a Slayer. Don't try to follow the shows any after your story starts.

Thanks. I have a lot more to add - I just happen to be suffering writers block, I have not written anything since last October. I do not want the Gilmore Girls knowing anything about the supernatural as I think it would so freak out Lorelai that it would destroy her bubbly personality.

As for following the shows this starts after the end of season five and will end before season six would start on Buffy - Although of course, six would be different in that Buffy did not die.

Please do more!

I'm looking foreward to Buffy meeting Rory.

Thanks for the review. At the moment I am finding it had to motivate myself to write anything. Hopefully I will get over my block soon.

Dave.

Just re read it - I think you have updated some of since the last time I read it?

Brilliant - please continue its too good a plot to leave!

:)

Thanks for the review. Sorry I have taken so long to comment on it (I did not receive notice from TTH for some reason!)

Hopefully I will get over my writers block soon.

I'm sorry, but this latest chapter does not really work for me. Not sure if it is because I haven't read fanfic for a while or because you tried to cram too much in one chapter.

The Buffy-Joyce talk: The Buffy overreacting and protenting was classic Buffy, but after the first shock it felt that Buffy came on too strong, but you nicely explained that with her abandonement issue, nice twist. The sex thing was (again) funny.

Overall the scene felt decent, but too short. (motivation: I think it might have been better if you had saved the scoobies for later and had it be just Buffy, Giles, Lorelei and Joyce-Willow perhaps, she had good lines, then they could have had more lines, and more suprises later for the others).

Nitpicking, I can't see Anya realise that Giles wants to be alone with Mrs and Mrs Summers-Gilmore (and act on it) - in contrary, I think she'd want to stay and watch. I mostly noticed the contrast because you used 'Anya' and 'Realised' in the same sentence just after she was talking about artificial penisses - Very good Anya line by the way. :-P

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About the marriage/engagement talks
While you used it twice in goods way to bring up the next topic, Lorelei can not congratulate Anya on getting married, as it happened in the final episode of season5, and (from your Riley-talk) you are still mid season 5. And without all the S5-stuff (Glory etc), would Xander have proposed at all? (I thought yes, Anya thougth no)

Secondly, are they going to ask willow Willow questions about her statement about wanting to marry Tara?
It is likely for Willow to know that anyway (researchgirl), so I'm guessing you brought it up for a reason. Yes, Willow has the dreamy love (although less the Buffy) that could have made her think of it, or Xander&Anya's engagement (?) could have brought it up, but it seems pretty early in their relationship to talk about.


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The Xander-Riley talk
I'm disappointed you still have Buffy and Riley split because I like the paring, especially after you particulary mentioned they did not split up at the start of the story.
But it works well with what is happening in the story. and it is good that you finally give the timeperiod the story is playing in. (But was it already collage summer holiday that early in the year?, I thought the episode was before christmas?)

About the Buffy being with Faith, it was a suprise and I can't see why you needed it for the story, but I'm not opposed to it either. (as long as it does not turn in an 'everybody's bi'-fic ;-) ).
But I am curious how carefull you work out the details; Did they just have feelings, or did they act on it? Did Buffy feel she cheated on Angel, is that why Faith shot him? You already brought up Willow's anthipathy for Faith; did she have feelings for Buffy? Faith? Or just (standard canon) because she felt closed out? Would that change if she finds out? Does answering all this leave room for the main plot of Joyce and Lorelei?

Further I have some personal issues with Xander still dreaming of Faith after she practically tried to attempt-rape him (Consequences, Not Zeppo). But As Joss doesn't care much about rape I realise that it probebly isn't much of an issue in Jossverse (or it's audience).

On the other hand, I wasn't really convinced by the shows version of this talk, and you added enough surprises and changes to make it your own.


So like I said, I'm not so positive about this chapter, but I got the impression you're soon going to move some of the characters to the Gillmore's house, so then I'm going to be a lot less critical and a lot more entertained because I don't know much about that show. :-)

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PS: Sorry for all the edits, but I got interrupted during the reviewing and after reading it over realised there were some mistakes and I\d forgotten something.

Thanks for the feedback. Sorry you could not get into this part!

Okay I concede your point although at times Anya did show some insight into other peoples feelings but still found it hard to express them around others (The scene in The Body where she is not sure how she should feel about Joyce’s death!) With fan fiction, you can always get around things like this by changing the character’s attitude to any given situation (Not saying this is what I am doing here!) I think Anya had great potential to grow especially if season six did not happen as it did in the show! If Joyce had been there for the gang to go to with their problems would it have changed things (absolutely).

I wanted them all together. It would be like anyone of us going to meet someone at a friend’s house with no knowledge of what was going to happen and before any talk can take place, our friend runs away.

I am sorry you did not like the part with Buffy and Riley splitting up? It was always my intention to have them break up but wanted it to take place a little different from canon. Yes in the show they did break up early in season but again this is fan fiction.

No not going to end up with everyone bi. As I said it just flowed out as I typed it! I always felt that within season three there was so much subtext between the two slayers that although nothing was stated in the show they did at least make out!

Normally when I start a story, I know where it will start, what will happen overall, and where I want it to end but much of the filling just comes from actually writing it. I may have Buffy actually visit Faith before she goes with her mother and stepmother to Stars Hollow but at this moment, I do not know if I will actually add that to the story or just refer to it. Did Willow have feelings for Buffy? In this story, no, but in many of my other stories - absolutely.

This story will always be focussed on Joyce and Lorelai.

I did not say he still fantasized about Buffy and Faith just that he used to. Hands up any straight male that thinks it would have been rape if someone like Faith or any other sexy female insisted you had sex with them when you were 17-18? Rape will never be a part of any of my stories.

You really should watch The Gilmore Girls. I am not sure who I will have travel to Stars Hollow at the moment other than it will not include Xander and Anya, I may have Giles go with Joyce, Buffy and Lorelai on his way to England for some reason? We will have to see?

Blessings

Dave.

Added:- I did say the Glory fight did happen just that Buffy did not die and Dawn did not get sent to her. So Xander proposed as canon, it is just that as Buffy did not die they felt able to tell everyone.

Asking Willow about her statement? Maybe but not relevant to the story.

D.

great update. I hope Buffy likes crow because she is going to have to eat heaps of it, and who knows maybe she meet a hottie in Connecticut after she makes peace with after saying goodbye to Captain Cardboard.

Thanks. Yes probably so! I do not know? I cannot think of any Gilmore character she could pair with? Taylor maybe? Eww lol.

Blessings

Dave.

I guess it is inevitable a fic starts out with a very odd and interesting pairing and by ch 7 it has progressed to an examination of just how incredibly screwed up Buffy is (not saying it is understandable but the girl has never been very stable, a card house of insecurities built on an unstable foundation of complexes, neuroses and traumas.

It does seem that way. But later seasons especially six did see Buffy more unstable! But how many of us could stay sane if we went through everything she went through! Who would want too?

Blessings

Dave.

hmmm, never thought of joyce this way. Yet this is me interested.

later and love
Bunney

Thanks.

I think your story is definitely becoming one of my favorites. I love the way you mix comedy with the drama. The way the Scoobies reacted to Joyce's news seemed to me to be perfectly in character. Anya's remarks made me laugh out loud and I liked seeing Xander being the mature one. Even if you didn't go far enough with his fantasy. Lol! I always felt there was more to the Buffy/Faith relationship than what showed up on the screen so I guess in this case: Like daughter like mother. Lol!

Thanks. The Faith/Buffy thing just seemed to flow out of the conversation! Well I could not reveal all the details of my... I mean Xander's fantasy. lol.

Blessings

Dave.

I like this story a lot and wonder where you are going with it. Looking forward to more.

Thanks. Do not ask me my muse has not told me yet!

Blessings

Dave.

Nice to see another chapter. Buffy's reaction is as expected.

I'm a little disappointed that you have Giles already tell about Willow and Tara, after you so clearly stated it at the top of S4 that she did not know about it yet I had expected it to be reveiled at a more importent moment.

Thanks. I know I said about keeping Willow and Tara's relationship secret but it just sort of made sense to me that he comment on it. But hey can still be fun with Lorelai asking for tips from them. lol.

Poor, poor Giles, I like freaked out Buffy, maybe theres a gay gene to straighten her out so to speak.

Thanks for the review. Now there is a strange thought? lol.

Blessings

Dave.

Besides being sexy as hell, I like your story because you show Joyce in a non-mom role. Always on the show, Joyce was "The Mother" to the whole Scooby Gang. But other than Band Candy we never saw what she was like when she was simply Joyce and not Mom-Joyce. I know from talking with my own mother, once I had grown up, and from watching friends who are moms that most women have to play the role of mom to various levels of excellence. But they are still people and I like seeing Joyce as a person as well as a mother. I like her quick wit and sexiness and how she and Lorelei are bonding. I hope you continue this lovely story as I just like seeing a happy sexy Joyce Summers-Gilmore.

Thanks. I am glad you get the difference between Joyce the mum and Joyce the woman, that is what I am aiming for.

Next part should be posted soon.

Blessings

Dave.

This is, on the whole, a well-written fic, but I'm having a lot of trouble buying Joyce's characterization. She's a quiet, almost understated character most of the time in canon, except when she really gets upset about something, and then she's got a will of steel. I can't see her taking waking up married to anyone so well, and the kind of Gilmore-esque banter you have her exchanging with Lorelai seems completely out of character to me.

It's unfair, but when you write slash with canonically straight characters, it becomes doubly important that the rest of their characterization stays really consistent with canon... making Joyce gay or even bi is a big enough change that you can't afford a lot of other character changes right away. Making Joyce gay and hyper and kinky and quippier than canon all at once just results in Joyce seeming completely OOC. When you change a character's sexuality, there's a burden to keep the rest of the character consistent, and I think you've overshot things a bit too much in this fic. And in doing so, you've lost a lot of great contrast between Joyce and Lorelai, because your Joyce is acting and speaking more like Lor than like herself. There's something to be said for having opposites attract, and a quieter, gentler Joyce might be a better match for Lor than the weird version of her you seem to be writing.

Just my two cents.

Thanks for the review. I had planned to explain about Joyce but CPTSkip did it for me. The Joyce we see in the show is only 'Buffy's mum' The Joyce in this story is 'Joyce the woman'. Within the series we knew very little of her life and love life outside of Ted (I am betting they never had sex!), Giles and that one date she had just before she died. I can think of many mothers (and fathers) that hide at least part of their lives from their children. So how can we be sure Joyce is not bisexual?

Blessings

Dave.

great update. I hope the way Buffy is acting will change when she meets Lorelai, or she is risking upsetting her mom, and quite possibly every single one of her friends.

Thanks. There are some things that come to light in the next part that makes Joyce sitting up and get some incite into her daughter's fears!

Got most of the next part written so hopefully you will not have to long to wait.

Blessings

Dave.

Worth the wait :)
Thanks.

No thank you.