Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from
SpacedCadetReview:
A fun story!
I think the number of crossovers you used really needed a longer story, or a number of stories, each building on what had been established previously, but I reallyenjoyed this.
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SpacedCadet] • Date [4 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from
SpacedCadetReview:
he allowed his body to shift back to undead mode and heal is 3rd degree sunburn and he felt a little better but still cranky.
It's a great line, but a 3rd degree sunburn would mean he was only one step away from bursting into flame and he's not that stupid. Either you need to explain why he stayed in direct sunlight even tho he was taking severe damage, or it should be something on the order of a severe 2nd degree sunburn.
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SpacedCadet] • Date [4 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from
SpacedCadetReview:
Lots and lots of fun!!!
"and it was the two processions that allowed him to survive being turned by a Vampire in Oxnard on the 10th of June"--I think you mean "possessions"
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SpacedCadet] • Date [4 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from
KirallieReview:
Interesting story if a little complex in the amount of crossovers you brought in and some for only a split second. Glad Xander kept his soul and loved the emails he sent in the last chapter.
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Kirallie] • Date [4 Oct 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from
NightrayReview:
very cool
Review By [
Nightray] • Date [29 Nov 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from
tasuxedaReview:
This story is great please update.
Review By [
tasuxeda] • Date [7 Aug 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from
mithrilandtjReview:
What does F.O.H. stand for?
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mithrilandtj] • Date [23 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from
BluesnowmanReview:
Awesome awesome story please please do a sequel. Please please please please please update The Black Dragon
Review By [
Bluesnowman] • Date [7 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from
ElleriaReview:
Love this. Sequel please?
Review By [
Elleria] • Date [6 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from
LordCorwinReview:
I'm shaking my head in disbelief .... Well done ... and NO cliffhanger ... amazing ... I certainly hope you keep up this thread in another story ... well done.
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LordCorwin] • Date [23 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from
LFWReview:
It is amazing how you were able to put that family tree together
Wow
Looking forward to some more of this, just to get some time with just Xander and Rachel
Oh, and I am quite interested in reading what the SGC might put together
Thanks
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LFW] • Date [22 Jun 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from
mithrilandtjReview:
Interesting. I like it the changes that the Hyena & the Soldier did.
But how is this story ANGEL-CENTERED when XANDER is the LEAD character?
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mithrilandtj] • Date [21 Jun 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from
InfinixReview:
Interesting story and a very good attempt at combining so many verses. Some of your spelling is a bit iffy and your tendency towards run on sentences can detract from the reading a bit but still a very good story.
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Infinix] • Date [18 Jun 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from
PhryReview:
Wow. I see you still haven't changed Oldfart. Can't come up with a storyline to save your life. Not to mention ripping off stories and posting it as your own, at least you credited an author this time.
To those who don't know this guy is notorious for stealing and not crediting work since early 2005 on FF.net. He subsequently deleted stories and eventually his account when people called him out on this little fact.
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Phry] • Date [17 Jun 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from
LadyYuehReview:
Alpha hyenas are FEMALE.
I think you should consider get a beta, there are few spelling mistakes peppered throughout.
It moves a bit fast. And some things are bit too coincidental and somewhat unbelievable.
Props for keeping with it though. Hope this helps.
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LadyYueh] • Date [17 Jun 07] • Not Rated
