I'm sorry, but I can't jump on the "oh this is awesome" bandwagon. Concept? I'm liking the concept. But I do have a some issues with the story, and reviews aren't just for sycophants.

Verbiage. Use the correct word. It's very apparent that you're relying on spellcheck to catch your errors, but if you don't know how to spell to begin with, you're increasing the chances that spellcheck will cripple your sentence with the wrong word. Enough crippled sentences cripple paragraphs, enough paragraphs cripple your story. I like this story, but the frequency with which I have to reread sentences so I can guess at what word you're trying to use is disturbing. I never use spell check. I force myself to know how to spell words correctly because I've been burned by spell check in junior high. When I read a draft, I'm also checking my spelling as I go along. And if I'm not sure, I'll grab a dictionary (I know it's a tedious way to rule out possible spellings, but it works) or choose a different word to convey the same sentiment.

Syntax. Grammar and punctuation aren't just for school. When used properly, they can show points of emphasis in a phrase, pauses, or just where sentences start and end.

SG-1. I'm okay with SG-1 crossovers. I'm okay with crossovers in which *I* know very little of some of the crossover sources. When the *writer* is unfamiliar, but I am, that bothers me, because, although I don't insist on pure canon in my fanfic (it *is* fanfic, after all) but I believe some things should be at least *close* to canon. The part where O'Neil wants Xander and Kyra checked out for baselines? Pretty much truth. Whereas I understand the characters' desire to not be checked out by another doctor (in this case, Frasier) calling Jack a liar for *that* was a bit out of line and threw me.

Consistency. You also spell Kyra's name Kira. Which is it? Pick one and stick with it.

Sentence structure. Let the sentences flow. There are entire paragraphs where yes, you've used actual sentences, but they're stunted and cramped, and don't flow into each other, thereby making the paragraphs choppy, and uncomfortable to read.

Overall, I like what you're doing here, but with some significant cleaning up, you'll realize drastic improvements in the quality of your writing. Granted, I know not everyone (if anyone) that posts stories here is a published author of anything, but hey, you never know who's reading, and may end up offering you a job.

I thank you for your input and criticism. I also thank you for stating your opinion and reasons, not just bitching and whining about what you don't like. It is true although i have watched a lot of Stargate I do not know a lot about it. I started them in this story more as a way to get the group off world. As far as the spelling and stuff...I have asked for beta readers and not had real reliable ones when i did get them. My email is on my profile so anytime anyone wishes they can tell me what they found where that needs restructuring or spelling. They can send me and idea of who to change something to make it fit more and I will in turn take those into consideration and try to fix them.

As far as a job...I like to write as a way to relax and escape from the real world for a time. Although it would be nice to get paid for a hobby...I don't want a job writing. The demands on the content and time deadlines and such would take the joy out of it. On the other hand I do have several things i am working on that I have been looking to build relationships with other writers who may co-write something with me as I need another creative mind when i get stuck (like I am on several unfinished fanfics).

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Trinity

I am so glad this story was continued! It's action at it's best! It's.... I really like it. :o) Can't wait for more.

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Trinity

Great stuff so far.

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Trinity

Im very interested in this story. Cant wait for an update!

Next one is in the works but may take a bit. It is dealing with the aftermath and I also want to work on a side story expanding on the last chapter.

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Trinity

cool

Thanks I plan on expanding the last chapter into a side story some time but I really wanted to update for now.

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Trinity

What is happening to Riddick throughout this? I hope that you update this. I enjoy this series and hope that you never lose your inspiration. You write well and I think that you might have a future as an author.

Not planing on telling more of Riddick's tale at the moment. He is back in his time and space. This is more about The start of (my version) the Furian race. Thank you very much for your comment. I have a little bit more written and hope to post it soon as I can remember to bring it with me when I have online access. LOL.

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Trinity

I like this story and am looking forward to any future updates to it. *HUGS*

Hugs back Jess,

I hope to have something soon. I have been updating some stories I hope to finish before posting while my muse works on figuring out the next chapter in this one or writes another side story.

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Trinity

Great story,
keep up the good work.

Thanks...I will not be online much for a while but I do hope to have something soon even if it is just a space filler of sorts.

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Trinity

good story please add soon.

As soon as I get help for writing some of the battles I plan to have in the next part I will post more.

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Trinity
(Spolier: I'm also thinking of adding a Pretender crossover, Jarod helps with Project Manticore if they help with the center? What do you think??)

I really like this one, can't wait for the update, but I gotta ask, the characters from Dark Angel, they wouldn't be Max and Alec would they? Coz that would be hella cool.
Cushty.

I'm working on short back stories while I figure that part out. I plan on having them in the story but remember they were born around 1999 so they will still be babies if I keep the timeline.

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Trinity

This story is great please update soon.

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Trinity

Awesome awesome awesome please continue this awesome story.

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Trinity

Excellent story so far, good work so far on the cross-overs; I'm looking forward to reading more.

I'm slowly adding supporting stories while I work on the main one.

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Trinity

Awesone story! Update soon!

Thank I hope to have an update and or some more side stories soon.

nice fic so far, hope to read more of x and riddik

thanks and there should be some more later. Things I can not explain in the main story without opening too many story arcs may be written as supporting stories like the Xander & Kyra relationship story.

Thanks for reading
Trinity