You know, normally I leave you a nice long review, but all I really want to see in this fic (or a different one hint hint) is Illyria regaining her full powers somehow. (Perhaps one or all of her "other selves" realize her weakness and restore her somehow? Fortifing Fred's body so it can handle the full of her power?) After she's decided she likes to help Wesley and co.

I always did wonder how WR&H would like her interfering with them owning Wesley and the others "After the Fall".

And as for the word "feening"? Well, a feen, is a coke feen/addict. So feening, well you get it.

I imagine that Illyria will be quite annoyed with you if your fragile mortal form expires before you finish her story.

Okay, NOW I'm somewhat terrified.
Nice going.

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I love the Illyria as ingenue vibe this chapter has. The thought of her eating at MacDonald's is so surreal. Not to mention Illyria in a trench coat. It's an engrossing exploration of the consequences of Illyria's biology shifting so dramatically. Her apparent callousness in selecting a random person off the street to feed off is tempered by her anguish at the loss of ability to hear the greensong. Which is another stickle-brick noun I adore. Illyria's insights into the legitimacy of her rule was very illuminating. Someone who styles themselves God-King would rule by divine right. She expected demons to perceive and acknowledge the self-evidence truth of her superiority. I was mildly surprised she would consider forcing people to her point of view to be reprehensible. Although, it's just one more thing she considers beneath her. I can't wait to find out her true motives for wanting to return to Vahla'ha'nesh. I hope you decide to continue this series.

Another chapter which hits all the right notes. We have a nice contrast between Wesley's perceptions of Illyria as all powerful and her own uncertainty. The imagery of Illyria as a grownup stepping over the strings Wesley has tied is particularly effective. I approve of the decision to make Illyria's posture whilst seated the thing that sets off Wesley's memories. It makes more sense than her saying something. She would no that alluding to Fred would hurt Wesley and we are supposed to be left with the impression that she wouldn't do it deliberately. Another high point for me was Illyria's I'm the centre of the world speech. It reminds me of Zaphod and the Total Perspective Vortex, there was a couple of eons there where she literally was the most important thing in the world. Wesley's mention of clothes was a great curve-ball thrown in at the end.

This is exactly what fan fic should be. You take a character and provide a completely fresh perspective on them.Watching the show I was so caught up in viewing Illyria as a threat that I never considered the process of losing a great portion of her powers would be painful to Illyria. Although in hindsight it is easy to see why she views showing pain as a weakness. It was an interesting choice to have Spike trying to talk to her. Fans go on ad nauseam about his insightfulness, so you know if he doesn't get she's in agony no one will. I also enjoyed the quick discussion, reinforced by Illyria's internal comment, that it is not just Illyria's physical powers the Angel crew has to worry about. In human history it is rarely a leaders physical prowess, which makes them formidable. We are reminded that Illyria ruled over vast dominions, with all that implies in terms of ruthlessness, cunning, and determination. Yes her current situation will test her as never before but she just might surprise us all. Well not you obviously cause you're writing it.

WHAT! No fish tacos? I am disappointed at that lapse in an otherwise carefully crafted work. The Illyria characterization is outstanding--can't wait to see more.

Well, there's a taco reference in the earlier story; no need to beat readers over the head with it.
(and I try not to use the obvious handles and props for a given character TOO often; that gets annoying fast.)

I'm gonna get back into the Illyria stuff at some point; it's just that Harmony sort of came out of nowhere and derailed my plans with the novel she's making me write.
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"They did not comprehend the consequences of their actions. Fools."

Looking forward to your next update.

Edit:
If you write about Illyria encountering the Goa'uld, I think her affect on them should be so profound and horrific, that they would run for light years just to get away.
I kind of like the idea of just a thought from her, would drive the Goa'uld insane, causing it the eat its host, leading to a painful and quick death.

So is Illyria going to get anything in from her temple, Vahla Ha’nesh. And can she change in to Fred, But Wesley had ask her no to so she won't. up-date soon

Me likes.

Only one minor nitpick - something seemed to go wrong back in the paragraph where Angel gave her 4 options: Option 3 seemed to be glossed over.

Like it so far, and your characterization of Illyira. and I can see her regain some of her power, But no a lot. hope you up-date soon.

Some authors don't like readers begging for more.

But if I was gonna, I would.

How could an author NOT like readers begging for more???
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Once I finish up the mandatory Buffyverse/Harry Potter story, I'll come back to this one.
::Grin::

I didn't watch much of the last season of Angel, so I don't have a lot to go by, but I really like this.

I thought Season Five was the strongest one Angel had, actually.
Illyria's story arc, towards the end, was certainly the highlight for me.

very nice

Very nice, I'm really enjoying this one.

I'm also hoping she regains a good portion of her powers and smacks Angel, Wes and the others around a bit. Their attitudes and pretty much everything they've said has just made me long to see them on the recieving end of a good old fashioned decapitation.

Looking forward to more.
Chris

A well-done charcterization of Illyira, as much as one might do a good one of her.

I wonder if your going to make the a x-over anytime in the future, maybe with Stargate? The conversation about a 'true ruler' would be good to have with Teal'c or Bra'tac, or any jaffa for that matter. Also, when you think about it, she once truly was what the Goul'd try to be and emluate.

The third or fourth story in this series will be a crossover with Stargate, yep, though I was leaning towards having her show up in Pegasus, and interacting with the Atlantis crew. I might change my mind before I get there, though. I wanted her to meet the Wraith, though as you said, the Goa'uld would basically shit themselves when they met a for-real goddess (and that's an encounter I'd love to see)