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LFWReview:
Read these again
Hoping that you continue
Looking forward to the debut of Xander Potter on the Hellmouth
And of course Cordelia's reaction; and Joyce
Thanks
Comments from author:
Working on the next chapter as I get the chance, but RL isn't being all that cooperative. ;-(
You can see Xander meeting Buffy for the first time, this time around, in "And Now For Something Completely Different," which is actually the first story in this series.
I haven't decided exactly how Xander's first meeting with Cordy is going to go after he was adopted into the Potter Family, but I'm sure it will be quite entertaining. ;-)
And Joyce is going to be in for a major reassessment of her life's beliefs in the near future. ;-)
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LFW] • Date [8 Oct 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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DesitaniaFReview:
Awesome story, Ginny being a traitor threw me for a loop but I'm going to give you the benefit of the doubt that the reasoning is plausible (I'll have to wait and see). Speaking of waiting and seeing, I hope you get the next chapter up soon, I hate waiting... I'm guessing life got in the way? I can't help but wonder who the romantic interests for Xander, Remus, and Sirius will be, even if you go Red Moon Rising and have Sirius and Remus together.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing, and I hope that I'll have something to post soon, but as you mentioned, RL keeps getting in the way. ;-(
There won't be any romantic interest for Xander in this part of the story, but I'm fairly sure you'll be surprised when you see who Remus gets paired up with. ;-)
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DesitaniaF] • Date [25 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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frankocsicReview:
cool story. there's tons of back in time fics, but this one is really unique. quite a nice change. the addition of sabrina and xander to the golden trio makes them a force to be reckoned with. and i also enjoyed the hilarity that ensued, they have great group dynamic. great job, and please update this!
Comments from author:
Thanks. I appreciate hearing from you, and I will be updating this story, hopefully sometime quite soon.
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frankocsic] • Date [24 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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miceddenReview:
update update iam going mad so can update soon
love the story
Comments from author:
That's just one of the stories I'm working on. I'm usually working on three or four different ones at the same time. Which ones get the most attention depends entirely on my muse's moods.
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micedden] • Date [25 Aug 08] • Not Rated
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bannerReview:
I just reread this story from the beginning, and the interactions and imagery is SO gripping. "Don't Make Me Angry" just pulled me right in. Again. I love it.
I was wondering who the Traitor might be. Percy seemed too obvious. I never actually liked Ginny (she always seemed to be JKR's way of *avoiding* a romance: just produce a girl who is crazy about the hero, and have her throw herself in his lap. "Girlfriend" plot line handled.) They are going to kill her tomorrow, and I can't wait. Just make sure that it can't be traced back to Our Heroes. Molly would never accept the necessity, if it hurts one of her children. Do it right, and we can galvanize the populace against the DE.
What is happening to Hedwig? Neville needs some help, too. What do the returnees think about Snape, especially since AD might have kept important information about Snape from them.
PLEASE kill the Umbitch painfully, OK?
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying the story.
As far as how other people will react to the guys dealing with the Traitor, I think you'll be quite surprised with how everything gets resolved.
And as far as Umbitch is concerned, death is far to good for her. ;-)
Review By [
banner] • Date [9 Jun 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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SkuertReview:
Nice Crossover so far.
Though i usually don't read Time Travel fics at all this one is rather nicely done.
Will we see the gang deal with Snape rather sooner than later?
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying the story. Snape will receive his due several chapters from now, since I have to continue setting things up.
Review By [
Skuert] • Date [18 May 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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atzReview:
This story is one of my favourites. The time line twist actually thought out properly, with characters making realisations as they deal with certain events. (eg. Xander recalling Cordy's futures once seeing her again) The powerups reasonably explained and balanced by consideration of possible negative outcomes. The family interactions being believable - I am still waiting for the comments about Bill's wedding to kick in after Molly gets home. And the typical snarky/fun comments between the team as they prepare things.
The fun you are having by linking Roger Zelanzy's world to this could really be expanded, can you see Xander undergoing the ritual at the Keep of the Four Worlds to then drop Harry off in Voldie's lap carrying a large bomb prior to trumping out again...
I look forward to seeing more, your comment re: Ginny was a well weighted cliffhanger!
Comments from author:
I'm glad you're enjoying the story and I think you'll like what's coming up in the next few chapters.
Really can't say anything at the moment about the Amber link, since I haven't decided just far I'm going to be going with that.
Anyway, thanks for reviewing and commenting.
Review By [
atz] • Date [14 May 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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SeekerSidheReview:
This is a great story. I really hope to see an update soon.
Comments from author:
Thanks. Hope to have something soon, but this is a very busy time of year for me.
Review By [
SeekerSidhe] • Date [26 Apr 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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MaxtafReview:
I've read a bunch of 'Harry goes back in time' stories, but only a couple have included even a single other person. I really like the 'the whole team goes back' thing.
I was initially thinking that it was, as the previous reviewer suggested, gratuitous. But then I thought about what I'd do if I was Harry. If I was going to do that myself, I would take note of where all the good toys were first, then go get them ASAP when I got back. I'd want to leave nothing to chance, and squash Old Moldy like the bug he is before he even knew it was coming. Like killing ants on a sidewalk with a sledgehammer. Overkill all the way. It will also make dealing with the Puppet Master easier.
Ginny is a traitor?! WTF!? Wow. That came out of nowhere. Although, that's what makes the best spies/traitors. I'm guessing it's either a leftover possession from the diary, or a 'If I can't be the love of Harry's life, then I'll make sure no one is' (or 'Ignore me, will you? I'll show you!') I'm normally a Harry/Ginny shipper, so this isn't my favorite aspect of the story, but then again, it's not my story. I am looking forward to reading more. Hope to see more of this soon.
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying the story as much as I'm enjoying writing it. ;-)
As far as the items they found in the vaults are concerned, none of them were aware of them in the previous timeline, since no one there was aware of Lily's non-Muggle ancestry, as I made a point of emphasizing in the story.
And as far as the items they found are concerned, and the power-up they all underwent, let me remind of that wonderful quote from 'The Seven Rules of Highly Successful Pirates': "There is no overkill; there is only 'open fire' and 'I need to reload'."
And as far as Ginny is concerned, you'll get an explanation for that in the next chapter. ;-)
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Maxtaf] • Date [20 Apr 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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FyrecatReview:
I love it! All the inheritances and toys are a bit gratuitous, but hey, It's all in the name of fun, isn't it?
PS. Here is a whole magically refilling plate of Muse cookies - If she can be convinced to work on 'Prophesies' for a while...
Comments from author:
First off, thanks for reviewing. ;-)
And yes, the inheritances and various toys might be considered a bit gratuitous, but I want to have fun with this story, so I'm throwing in a few potential plot bunnies for later use. ;-)
And I think you'll be glad to hear that I'm almost finished the next chapter of Prophecies. I hope to get it finished this week while I'm traveling for my job. (Sitting around airports and on airplanes provided a lot of free time to fill.)
Review By [
Fyrecat] • Date [20 Apr 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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TroyGuffeyReview:
Interesting story, although it is showing a bit of the "power ritual and picking awesome gear" formula.
The bit about Ginny being a Traitor came COMPLETELY out of nowhere.
You missed something about the House Weasley - House Potter bit. Even if Arthur's first impulse was for a fealty oath, Harry should have suggested an *Alliance* oath.
Looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing, and glad you're enjoying the story. This story is written in response to a challenge on one of the HP Yahoo groups, so I'm just complying with most of the requirements, while trying not too too overboard while doing so.
The bit with Ginny will be explained in the next chapter.
And the Weasleys were included in the oaths of alliance mentioned at the end of the last chapter. I thought I had made that clear, but evidently, I hadn't. Harry didn't mention it when Arthur offered the fealty oath because he was taken completely by surprise that Arthur and Molly would even consider it.
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TroyGuffey] • Date [1 Apr 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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grouchieReview:
I am becoming a very big fan I started out just reading this story and "prophecies?" but am now going back your other stories I don't know what to say but another great chapter. But Ginny how can you make her a traitor. I like her if you are going to please say it was a left over from the possession.
Comments from author:
The problem with Ginny is going to be the main focus of the next chapter, so I can't really say anythign about it here. Glad you're enjoying this and my other stories. Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [
grouchie] • Date [30 Mar 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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RichardthrnnsxReview:
This story is very well done with a very ambitious plot. The inclusion of Sabina was cute but the Goblins subplot is inspired and look I forward to its development.
I am greatly enjoying your characterizations and the interactions. I reread all chapters when a new one is posted and the continuity is excellent. Please keep up the excellent work, this is turning into one of my favorite stories this year.
Thanks for sharing, Richard3116
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying reading the story as much as I'm enjoying writing it.
I also like to blend in characters I haven't seen anyone else use, and try to make plot lines that I haven't seen others use, too.
Thanks for reviewing and commenting.
Review By [
Richardthrnnsx] • Date [24 Mar 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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DragonelfReview:
Really good story far and I hope we will see you inspired to add a myriad of new chapters to it.
::Feeds the plot bunny::
Comments from author:
Thanks. I'm working on the next chapter now.
Review By [
Dragonelf] • Date [24 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "4" from
LFWReview:
Wow
yep, wow
More please
Comments from author:
Working on the next chapter now.
Thanks.
Review By [
LFW] • Date [24 Mar 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]