Thanks for the great update. You've set up a great cliffhanger on several fronts, and I'm looking forward to the next episode.

Can't wait to read the next installment. I really love what you've done with Faith's character. She is great with Julian and the I'm not sure where the Buffy/Faith Slayer relationship is going. Please update soon. Congratulations on finishing the first Episode.

This continues to be a fascinating read. Thank you for your rapid update process. I look forward to getting new chapters to read.

Excellent, I am so pleased you didn't kill Veruca and to have her kidnapped by the Initative is a much more refreshing thing to have happen to her.

I'm enjoying reading about Jules.

Well, I can't compare this to your other versions, since I don't know what they were. ;-) It was alright, but seems a little "transitional" to me. Since we already know that Faith is on the job, the drama of Buffy and Oz realizing Veruca's target isn't quite there. I might have left out the bit after the rest of the band left the room, to make it a surprise when/if Faith shows up, and to heighten the suspense of Buffy and Oz racing off to the rescue. Overall, though, the story is definitely worth continuing (for the reader and the author -- hint, hint).

Well, my other versions were kinda boring.. all talk no show.. I hated it.. except maybe the part that I now altered and used in the next chapter.. that wasn't boring.. I think..
It would've probably been a better idea to have left the Faith/Julian convo out but I have problems with building up suspence because I get too caught up in it and then I freak myself out..
This didn't make any sense at all, did it?
Anyway, thanks for reviewing and I do appreciate your input, it helps me out a lot.

Enjoying the story very much so far. Glad Faith warned Veruca not to bite anyone and commented to Oz she knew he was a werewolf too.

The story's really moving along now. I love Oz's thumbs up from the couch, and Faith's band teasing her.

I really do appreciate how quickly you're working on this, but I noticed a couple of typos (well, not typos so much as the incorrect word -- and unfortunately, I can't find any examples again of that) and one or two awkward phrasings.

"Matt was banging his drumsticks to a steady rhythm while Pete was doing an attempt at rapping, and failing at it, to it." -- I understand what this means, but I had to read it two or three times to parse it fully.

"Faith snorted inaudible" -- shouldn't that be "inaudibly"?

Don't want to nit-pick, but I'd like to provide something (hopefully) helpful to you in exchange for the entertainment value you've given me. :-)

You're not nit-picking, really. I appreciate you taking the time to point these things out.

I have a tendency to be absoluetly oblivious to any errors I make but I'm re-reading the whole thing and altering anything that doesn't really sound right.

Thank you, really, for reviewing.

Intriguing thus far. I like it.

Great chapter! I loved the interaction between Faith and the gang before they knew who she was.

I'm intrigued by the nature of her relationship with Julian, and like the byplay between them.

Not related to this chapter or the previous, but it suddenly hit me while I was reading: did Buffy still die when facing the Master, and did Kendra get called and die when facing Angelus? Does this mean there is a *third* Slayer running around out there somewhere? }:> Inquiring minds want to know.

You're the first one to ask that and I can give you the answers now but where's the fun in that?
You'll just have to stay tuned to ease your inquiring mind =)

Thanks for reviewing, I'm glad you like it so far =)

I like this start to the story. AUs are rarely my thing, but I concur with your instinct that Fath really is a rock-chick at heart. Looking forward to seeing where you take this.

That chapter now reads much better, I love the last section describing the snapping of the vampire's bone. It's gruesome and why did we never see Buffy do that?

Because Buffy isn't Faith, she's a little too... uhm... good? prissy? (by lack for a better word)
Okay, now I can stop stressing about your previous review.
Thanks for this review that makes me feel a lot better.

Great start and a great concept! The beginning didn't throw me off too much, but I had already ready the previous review, so maybe that's why.

I'm interested to see how much of the back-story you fill in for what happened in S3 since Faith wasn't around then.

Can't think of anything I'd change, except to have more of it, now! ;-)

I've sorta cut the original beginning and added another chapter ending.
You know, to be perfectly honest, I'm interested to see how much of the back-story as well.. but that's not for now, Faith's not quite there yet =)

Thank you for reviewing and I'm really glad you like it so far... Hope to keep having your attention for this fic in the future =)

I see action and romance described and Faith in a rock band and older than Buffy, excellent, I am prepared to love this story already.

But what is this? An icky child abuse scene as the first introduction to your story.

That isn't interesting that's off putting - to me anyway. Where is the build up to this shock event, why plunge me the reader into this horribleness the second I start reading?

"The scene shifts, I hate it when it does that. Why does it have to shift? It only gets worse with every other scene, so stop the fucking shifted goddamnit! Oh god no, not this again,"

I was thinking this myself as this time around Faith gets tortured by Travers.

"--TUYRF—"

What do those intials mean?

""Faith, wake up.”

“Fuck.” Faith shot up straight in her bed, breathing heavily with small drops of sweat dripping from her forehead. She looked around her surroundings and sighed happily when she was still in the motel room her and her friends inhabited.

“You okay? You were screaming again.” Julian, the only one Faith would call friend in public, asked concerned."

See, now that is good, I am interested, why not have that paragraph as your introduction and we can find out about the hybrid later?

The whole scene plays well and gets the information across about Faith's sad childhood and why there are two slayers.

Julian looks to be an okay OC so far.

And spotting the Iniative at work great, then the scene in the Bronze excellent.

Faith all excited about five vampires and two werewolves in one place and she wants to kill them all.

Excellent!

Looking forward to next installment.

But if Faith thinks werewolves are evil, shouldn't she think witches are evil too?

I'm hoping Veruca lives in this story - her being a fellow rock chick of Faith's and everything.

The initials are 'Throw Up Your Rock Fist', I do that with a lot of stories as a cut to new scenes...

The first introduction can indeed be off-putting but the introduction is how I saw it to begin with. Some will hate it and others might not, it's a "risk" I'll have to take. But.. although, I may have been a little ahead of myself with the hybrid. If I can find the time I'll see if I could change some or all of the introduction.

I'm pretty proud of Julian. I put a lot of thought in him, I hope when the story progresses you'll think more of him than just 'an okay OC'.

About those werewolves, you'll see where I'm going with those.

And Veruca.. that you'll just have to wait and see for that as well.

Thank you for reviewing and despite the off putting introduction, I hope you enjoy the rest =)


EDIT: See what you made me do? I cut the off-putting introduction and wrote anothe chapter-ending... I wanna be like... angry or something but that would be just stupid so I just wanna thank you, I guess.. Normally I probably would've just given up on 'Throw Up Your Rock Fist' after a review like yours but you just got me thinking and you were right. (And you probably think I'm totally sucking up right now..)
Okay anyway, I edited it and I've gotten a better idea (in my eyes at least but that actually doesn't mean anything...) to get the idea of the original introduction over.