this is so good to let it die please write more....

When will you updating this story? I waiting to read more.

Ch.3 was awesome! I cant wait for the next part to come out!! Keep 'em coming!


Please update soon! ^_^

*chuckles* I'll try..

Finally a look at the true Xander. Not the 'zeppo' presence that he projects, but the real true him *sad smile* And finally time for Buffy and Willow to get a reality check. *shrugs* I do agree that they haven't always treated him right.

*grins* that'll be shown next chapter.....

*sighs* all three of them will go over what had hurt them, and why it happened.

I'm glad you liked it! *cuddles my Xander plushie*

awesome new chapter i love how it showed how much xander did for the girls and how smart he really is. cant wait to read more

I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Great new chapter. Keep up the good work! Can't wait to see more soon!

I have a lot coming up.. so it may be a while.

Hopefully by the end of the month I should have more!

Thanks!

Fabulous chapter and I look forward to seeing what happens next. I love seeing how the group is bonding and become more cohesive and I was glad to see Adam help save Dawn from Glory.


Thanks
Calia

*preens*

Glad I could make it to your liking! The next chapter will take a bit longer.... and it will hold angst.

:( but it's the way the bunny wants it.

Thankies Calia!!!

Hey!

Hope this cheers you up.

http://www.tthfanfic.org/Story-15215-40/TexasAries+Hellmouth+Story+Banners.htm

Personally I like the story. I think there is a lot of potential and I hope you keep posting.

*pounces* I love the banners you've made for me!!!!!

*dances happily* they are sooooo cool!

*smiles* I should have more out this weekend.... *waves* cheers! and Thanks!

Interesting idea, but immediate acceptance by everyone except Buffy looks too improbable. Getting a bunch of government-hired 'protectors' not long after another bunch of government really screwed up should at least force Scoobies to ask themselves what can go wrong and what strings as are attached to the offer. And it is quite solid string - government gets 3 perfect hostages to utilize whenever they want to force Buffy or Willow to do anything. Like becoming research subjects of new Initiative or using some mind control magic to help with somebody's political goals.
I don't see your fic as Buffy bashing - actually she seems to show most common sense out of whole group.

*chuckles*I think I should have put an AU marking in it too......

But the people they took are mostly all for the people, so that would negate anything overtly bad.

The main worries they would have is Mr&Mrs Smith when it comes to the government but I can see you point.

Thanks for the review!

Too many crossings, an improbable premise, OOC behavior, and character bashing. Next.

......

*shrugs* It's your opinion and I have no issues with it.

Thank you for giving it a chance

Oh i really love this fic, it's such a nice combination. I'm a big fan of the xan-man. Can't wait to see more! Keep up the good work!

*smiles* glad you like it!

Very promising. Looking forward to more.

I'm glad you like it!

*hugs* thank you for your review!

I love it! Thank you for answering my challenge. I cannot wait to see how the households mesh and how each of the Scoobies deal with the new arrivals.


Thanks
Calia

*preens* You're very welcome!

I saw it and it clicked ya know....

This looks like it'll be fun! Lara Croft & Mrs Smith - room for hijinks there as both played by Angelina Jolie!

jen

*snickers* yep! but I needed the bad-assed chicks... so they got chosen.

*smiles* glad you enjoy it!

I have been looking forward to someone writing for this challenge. Although challenges with a lot of detail up front are hard to write because they're a bit restrictive.

You've gotten the Lara Croft thing already, so I won't mention that.

Real Estate Agents are Realtors.

Methos could have found the real estate office in the phone book so I'm not really concerned about how he knew to call them.

A little scene setting is important. Descriptions of not just people but places and things allow your reader to picture the scene in their head and make themselves more comfortable with the interactions.

Writing multiple character scenes is tricky. Sometimes I've even resorted to making myself a list of who all is in the scene and checking to see if I wrote interactions and or dialogue for them all. If I haven't then I ask myself if that character is necessary for the scene or if I'm just trying to cram as many people into a scene as possible.

Review and constructive criticism are not meant to degrade you but to do just the opposite, usually the intent is to help you flesh out your story a little more and tell you what you're doing right. Occasionally you will get the person who only reviews to tear down other people, but you can usually tell the difference between sincerity and meanness.

I like the story overall and would only think about working on your dialogue techniques a little more. After some rough starts with my earlier fics, I learned to read my dialogue out loud like lines in a play. If it sounds stilted or unnatural when I say it, then it will probably come off that way to readers too.

I should have mentioned that I was going to use Canadian/British spelling then.

I have two issues with writing.... I either do simply background.... or I forget parts of it....

I thank you for your input.... It'll help with the next few chapters......