I LOVE this story! I can't wait to see what happens next! I absolutely loved Spike's reaction to Dawn and Ardeth! More soon, please?

~ Kyra

once I gind the file, sure. my flsh drive went missing

Very good story, i hope Spike and Dawn will be good friends....

remeber this isn't the Dawn of canon. She grew up among a warrior people and she's not afraid of her magic and power. GLory may not happen here, I don't knoiw.

yay! You updated again. Love the frequent updates. I like how Spike knew about Aredeth. I really wonder how the watcher's council is going to react though, not that they'd ever receive any of the information. It 'is' Giles and Buffy after all. :)

Great work! Keep it coming!

No but if BUffy finds out the council knew what happened to Dawn and never told Giles, Wes or her....

woah.... that was wicked.

I can see the resentment starting soon.... that and the entrance of Giles, Willow and Xander.....

I con only wonder if Joyce is going to mediate for the group or if what is said is going to just be hashed out.....

*hugs* great job! I love it!

well, she didn't exactly 'say' anything bad.

I love this chapter. That Dawn told everything straight forward and didn't leave anything out. I can't wait to read more. Please come back soon.

Soon as i can. Glad you liked it. This one I started last night and finished today.

Wow. Dawn was sure blunt in this chapter. XD loved it. Odd to picture her and Aredeth in limos though...or any desert people really. Good work, and keep it up!

No odder than for her ot be in it. Ardeth didn't want to use that but he needed to get them there and he doesn't know the town yet so he doesn't know where it's safe to walk. Give him a day and nothing will want to mess with him.

Glad you liked it.

You said Dawn was eight when Ardeth found her. Buffy wasn't a Slayer at that time and Dawn wouldn't have any memory of this part of her life according to your time line. Yet, Ardeth's speaking derogatory about someone he's never met and who Dawn cares about. This seems extremely out of character for both characters. He's a loving father who took his daughter to England every year to celebrate a holiday not part of his culture. Another part that doesn't make sense, you talk about Joyce and Buffy living on a Hellmouth, but I thought the premise was the problems at Hemery and Buffy becoming a Slayer occurred while Hank was in Egypt with Dawn, which was why for some unknown reason Joyce didn't know Hank had died? If Ardeth was so wealthy why wouldn't he use his own resources to find Dawn's mother? He knew the scout Hank hired led him into the desert to kill him and steal Dawn. Why would he assume her family would know where to look for her?

This story has great potential. There just seems to be a few plot holes.

okay, please read the notes. I said I changed the time line a bit. I also said Ardeth had informers out so he would know about Buffy. and also remember Dawn has been raised Medjai, she made a life among those people. She cares about Buffy but Buffy was spoiled when they were younger. Buffy said she was Queen of her school in LA and lazy in class. She admitted that. To Dawn it would make Sense that that hadn't changed. and notice Ardeth said she was half assed trained, not that she was half assed. please read what is said.

Ardeth is coming now to look out for both of them, and i said in part two, he did look and he had several people who just wanted money about her so he wasn't not looking, but America is a big country and Dawn didn't know where they were. hank never mailed her letters to Joyce and Buffy so Dawn didn't now they were in the same place.

Also, remember Ardeth knew he led him out there to die but that does not mean Joyce did not know they were going to Egypt and Hank got Dawn in the divorce. The news got there a year later AFTER (I put in caps for emphasis, I'm not yelling) Buffy burned the gym down. Ardeth is not Omniscient and Dawn wasn't sure where her mom and Buffy were. and after a year he adopted her because his searches turned up nothing. Ardeth is not God. he can't do everything but he was looking. Read part two again.

When he found out about them when the watcher in Cairo went to him, he found out about Buffy and the training he was told she had to him is slip-shod and undisciplined. Remember who he is and what he was raised with all his life.
BUT He did not Say Buffy was bad, just that she could use help.
Hank moved them away from LA. it would stand to reason they moved, too. To her anyway, she was eight. Also, in bitter divorces, the child of each parent if they're young, the one each parent gets, is normally told the other parent doesn't want them any more. that one i read about for a paper I wrote on acrimonious divorces and their affect on children

He had research done on Buffy and Joyce after Cairo Watcher spoked to him about his daughter. It's no secret she's adopted but you seem to think watchers should have known she was Buffy's sister when on one knew about her until Giles called him about it when Buffy told him. He thought if she was sin Egypt maybe the Watcher stationed there, a friend for once, could look into it. But that was still AFTER they came to Sunnydale and AFTER the Watcher worked up the nerve to approach the medjai king. And it took time for Buffy to talk to Giles about Dawn. Like as in the third or fourth year she refused to train on a certain date. (Dawn's B-Day, she and Joyce just sit together and remember)

Joyce may have gotten Dawn's letters After Hank died, they were in the house they had to clean out, though and Buffy may hate him more for this.

But Ardeth looked in to them when he was contacted and when he knew it was, for certain, her family, he talked to her about going. and he told her her sister could use help. how often did Buffy whine she needed help to fight and patrol? Someone else to carry part of the burden? To me, my opinion, it seemed to be a lot.

When he meets her he may revise his initial opinion from what he found in his research but that depends on how she handles her little sister being able to put her on her ass and control her magic better than Willow can.

I like this idea, please post more soon! love xx Shezzi

working on more now

Very intriguing, please continue!

I will. hey, you should see my ohter ones for Dawn..in one she belongs to Jason Blood and in one ot Leo Wyatt. among other things

Interesting setup. I look forward to seeing where you go with Dawn's story. If it is not too much to ask, how about paring Joyce up with Ardeth? I think they'd make a great couple and Ardeth would be a great father for Buffy. Lol!

I don't think so on the pairing, sorry. but he will be around because he has legal custody of Dawn, too.

Great chapter, love that you got it up so fast. My favorite part was when her father put the tattoos on her himself. I get the feeling that Buffy is expecting 'Little Girl Dawnie' and I can't wait to see what happens when everyone meets up. Please come back soon, this story is turning into one of my favorite stories.

I have part of the next part handwritten.

I love the fact that Buffy is accepting... I have the best feeling that she's going to freak out when she finds that Dawn is a better fighter than her.....

I wonder what will happen to the girl's attitudes when the find out that "normal" people have been fighting longer than they have....

she's gonna freak all right. and watching how Dawn works with her fahter, she cna pace him. She can't beat him but she cna fight him hard for more than a minute.

and the phrase denial comes ot mind. how cna what the wathcers said be al lie?/

WEEEEEEEEEE!!!!

I love it!!!

Grat job!

Loved what exactly?

YAY! You updated so fast! Makes me happy. :) I can't wait for the next chapter. I wonder how this new Dawn will change things?

Well, seeing as her father scares most deons adn she's no slouch in the fighting area...

I love Dawn's indecisiveness.... She knows that she might not be able to live with her birth family if she finds them or they find her.....

You portray the Medjai wonderfully and Adreth's devotion is to the T.

I can't wait to see how you'll get Dawn to react to those fighting with Buffy on the Hellmouth.....

by the time she does she knows she cna't. she's Medjai, through and through.
well, Ardeth gave his word he'd look after her and he is lokoing after her.
not well, kinda coolly consideirng what she guards and how far she'll go where they draw a line at a certina place.