While you show a remarkable ability to tell a story, you apparently have no idea how to label one. Nothing in the story so far has anything to really do with Xander, beyond being Voldemort's heir. You might as well take out all the scenes dealing with the Buffy-verse and replace Xander and Ethan with original characters.

Great writing :)

It was a very good story and I like how the plot was written and developed to suit the story.The story was very emotional and well written with a lot of description.

This was an excellent story, even if it was a sad & happy mix at the end. ^_^ Great work!!

Beautiful story, it made me cry, but I loved reading it. You did a great job writing it....

I laughed and I cried.
What more could I have asked for.
Great job on conveying the atmosphere.
Great writing and I look forward to reading the sequel!

Wover

I truly and deeply do love this story. Swear to God. It's positively lovely. And Percy's suicide just about broke my heart after everything else that's happened.

And I loved some bits in the article. Ya know... "V********" and "see pages 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13... etc". A silly little touch.

...But really that was rather anticlimactic. I mean, of course it's not the CLIMAX, considering that I still have yet to read chapters 14-20[and 21?]. But... wha? We don't get any information or battle scenes or Cassie-shaped-confrontational-goodness?

Okay, okay, I'll keep reading. *taps foot impatiently*

Ta!
~Tamora, the Cardboard Moon

So wait, we're supposed to hate Sirius because he's a bully and admire Snape despite the fact that he's the most vile bully we see in the books? This story had a pretty interesting idea, so I'm sad to see it so quickly become unreadable due to this Snape adoration crap. Snape constantly picks on students in his class. He also not only allows, but encourages his Slytherins to bully others. We have seen Sirius and James being jerks in the books, but I don't think we've seen anything that even suggests they were bullying at a level that would drive someone to suicide. This whole development is just ridiculous. You're a pretty good writer, but trying to make a bully as disgusting and reprehensible as Snape a good guy by making him the victim of some horrible bullying by a character like Sirius is beyond silly. It's gross.

*claps*

I hope they kick Draco's ass from here to kingdom come.

Oh thank you. Thank you, thank you, thank you.
I was waiting for those two to finally admit it. And Ron and Hermione.
Nice to see some rays of light.

Oh. My. God.
That is love. Oh God. I can't ... I mean I can imagine but that is devotion and dedication.
That is love.

Oh and is the Death Eater who told her to run, Snape?
Let it be Sevvy :-D

Awww.
Go Cass! And Xander DOES have stick-outy ears lol
They are so cute with those brown eyes. Oh and I hope Jessie doesn't die.
They are sooo adorable the three of them.

Oh wow. You had me at the first paragraph.
Making her a Bone, the requirment of a witch getting pregnant. The blood vow.
It was absolute genius and so intricate. She can't go for help but there is no way they can betray her. And Xander is damn powerful. Probably more than Harry. It is absolutely wicked.
And Ethan? Wow. I was always indifferent to him but he seems so real, likable even.
Cassandra seems real. The right touch of defiance and fear, strength and mind-numbing uncertinty. Just beautiful