I read the entire story, and I love the concept. My issues with it lie in the grammar usage and the spelling. Many times, the story contains run-on sentence after run-on sentence, which makes it difficult for readers such as myself to get through the story and grasp the meaning. In dialogue containing questions, put a question mark after it, then the quotation/ new sentence. My other issue is that Willow seemed too eager to accept that Sirius was her father, and that Snape and Giles were too eager to accept eachother's word that either one was not a follower of Voldemort.

This is one of my favorite stories, I hope you update soon. I've read the chapters you've had up several times already, although i think this is the first time I've reviewed.

Starts off well, like it it has promise. tehe what is sirius gonna say about willow with Angel?! that could be really amusing keep going! :-)

Lovely idea. I liked how you expained away Willow's abilities and her family life in a few lines. May want to put something in for why all the people are going with Sirius to the Hellmouth. A nice flashback scene perhaps? Just seems like an awfully large, conspicuous group.

Spelling is much improved, but some sections are still a bit rough. Accept for except, three months for three month, etc. May try the "reading aloud" method to iron out the rough spots.

Always enjoy when Spike calls her Mum-just seems like that relationship gives those two exactly what they always needed-someone to rely on them and support them in turn.

I like how your sense of humor puts the AU elements together to allow the enitre "team" to still be friends or together on both sides.
The question now is without a chipped Spike... and without them discovering the initiaitve... and with Snape being aparently
either both Willow's and Buffy's type or just one... well curious on how things unfold.

I've read one or two fan-fics that have decided that Wizard vampires automatically keep their souls and have the deamon, and am wondering if you'll do something like that with Spike.
Of course I could be way-off base... but your story elements to have me intruiged and thinking. Thanks!

A few spellings errors that detracted from the yumminess of the story so far. I love the way you've got Spike calling Willow 'mum', but shouldn't it be 'grandmum' - even though that would be a bit too weird. I can't wait to see what happens when the two groups meet, especially Spike and Draco - I've been reading Echo's stories a lot, and so I keep seeing them related, although that does kinda make sense with the blond hair and blue eyes. ANYWAY, please write more - I want to find out what the other pairings will be, apart from Willow/Angel and Xander/Anya. Loadsa love, Zira

Great start! I hope you write another chapter soon. I can't wait for Sirus to meet willow again!

This is a great start. I hope you post more soon.

Lisa

go for it [o: