Hmm, will Buffy be able to get Sirius a fair trial and will he become a free man? I guess we'll have to wait and see. Can't wait to find out :)

I really want to read your story. You have drawn me in with this first chapter. Half the work of writing is catching the readers attention. You have done that. Yeah for you!!! However, the other half is editing your story. You have to get someone to edit for you. I want to read this. I am craving a good crossover. You have all the makings of one. You just need someone to edit it for you. Please keep writing because it is good but without editing it is hard to read.

Best wishes,
meks

are ugoing to update... i love this soy it is unusual.. please continue

Yes, as soon as i can! chapter 9 is betaed but my (insert swearing) computer and email account were acting up now that i have a new email my beta and i are hoping it will be easy to get up the next 2 chapters up!
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LOVE THIS STORY!!! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!! I can't wait to read about what happens when Victor and Buffy meet. Is he going to take her to the Yule Ball instead of Hermione? I hope Harry brings Ginny. Their one of my favorite Harry Potter pairings.

Chapter nine is being beta-ed right now. Buffy and the gang will end up at Hogwarts by chapter 15 (i hope). Buffy and Viktor will meet shortly after. Harry will probably end up taking Ginny i never liked him having a crush on/dating Cho.
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Very nice, keep up the good work

Thank you
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Okay... add another vote for serious need of a beta (One willing to back over your earlier chapters and help you fix them. And one who can show you how to format/write dialog in a readable fashion.)

And you might want to work on your pacing... you tend to pack too much into a paragraph.

Okay... the issue of names -- sure you can change events around, resurrecting some characters and killing others off at your own whim -- we all do that to some extent. But getting character names, physical descriptions, personalities wrong intentionally - just because you can - ??? Why would you do that?

Names are important in fan fiction -- they are a framing device. They give the reader a point of reference. A way to connect with the story.

In one movie and 144 episodes (no idea about books or comics) - Buffy was never called "Elizabeth". Calling her that makes her into a different character. "Buffy" is light and fluffy. Totally unexpected as a "super hero" - which was part of the whole genre twist going on. An "Elizabeth" is someone more mature, more reserved. Very unlikely to survive the twists and turns that 'Buffy' had the flexibility to over come.

And who is this Mrs. Calendar you refer to? Jenny Calendar wasn't married as far as we know.

Yes i know and i am working on it i started this in July and intended to have it finished by know, circumstances left me unable to meet that goal.
I'll try to do that i was feeling rushed which was probably conveyed in the story.

i am going back to change her height i had no idea how tall she was but i figured 5"5 would be a happy median and since i am aware that shes 5"3 know ill change it. As for Rory i will be correcting that too on here. (no offense but people on here are more picky then on ff.net plus its easy-er to change on here too)
As for Ms. Calender word messed that up and i had not noticed until you pointed it out.
Thank you
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You *badly* need a beta reader - the numerous grammatical errors make this a difficult story to read. Also, I see that I - *once again* - must remind a fanfic author that Buffy's official full name is Buffy Anne Summers, *not* Elizabeth. She is also 5' 3", not 5' 5", and Xander's uncle's name is Rory, not Royal. All of this information is easily obtainable from IMDB.com, a resource I suggest you avail yourself of before any further writing.

i do have one and will be posting the corrected version of ch.8 after this and asking them to go over the Previous chapters. Yes i am aware of those facts but my story is Fanfiction where i can twist and warp the truth to what i want or need it to be. Just like people do when they say Joyce or Tara are alive it simply fits the plot off my story, and i do know about IMDB.com
Thank You for reviewing
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Ps i didnt know Buffys height and it will be corrected soon

I realize that you're trying to improve your grammar, etc. in each new chapter, but I think it would also be beneficial to go back and edit from the beginning. When a story is difficult to read (especially in the beginning!), readers are often put off or discouraged, and will more than likely hit the back button. Your story could have the most engaging plot in the world, but we readers are lazy and don't want to do any more work than we need to. A beta reader could help you with your grammar, spelling, etc. But keep trying - you've got an unusual pairing working to your advantage, and the makings of a good story, with a bit of editing. But was it just me, or was Xander's uncle named Rory?

If you're interested in help on the editing front, feel free to e-mail me at Nightmarin@gmail.com. I'm working on a few fics already, but I'd be happy to help where I can. Or you could check out the TtH forum.

thank you for pointing that out i will be asking my Beta to look over previous ones. Yes, but i warped his name it sounded better to me when i wrote the first draft. I do need help with the fonts on hear i wanted Xander's thoughts and the spell italicized and it did everything down from that and it wont stop to my annoyance.
Thank you
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nice Nice nice pleast do add more

there will be soon, glad you liked it
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I like your idea. It's original and fresh. The only real problem I'm having with the story is the grammar stuff. It's difficult to read when everything blends together and the writing is unclear.

Thank you yeah ive been trying to work on it. someone from ff.net might be betaing it. the thing that gives me touble is spacing and periods. i also tend to use run on senteces the hardest thing is kirbing them i also wrote the chapter from around 12-1 this morning so its probably not the best thanks for reviewing
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I like your ideas and the story, I do have a suggestion to make your writing more engageing to the reader. Try to show and not tell what is going on. (telling) Needless to say Cordy and Buffy where completely shocked. (showing) Cordy fell into the couch with a faraway look in her eyes as Buffy stood with a glazed look. There was so much she didn't know about Giles, she realized. Why did he keep this secret from her? She thought to herself. Absently she shook her head trying to get over her shock.) Just a suggestion, it is more difficult and it takes a lot more to write that kind of stuff, but as a general rule it will draw the reader in more. (I still have a tendency to tell a lot too sometimes it is a hard habbit to break.) :-)

thanks i didnt realise i did that i'll have to watch that in the future
would you mind if i put in what you wrote?
Thanks for reviewing
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The story idea is interesting but all the grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors make it very hard to follow the story. I had to keep trying to interpret what you were trying to say versus what you actually said. Some quick examples off the top of my head: [you're] means [you are], I think you meant to use [your]; [along] means [with] and I think you meant [a long]; [ill] means [sick], and I think you meant [I'll] for [I will]. More complex sentences would also increase the apparent target age group of your readers.

Thanks, i aggree and im trying to correct it one off my friends pointed out that grammers something everyone has to work at and with only having english 1/2 off the year i neglect it shamefully still im working at it i certinly hope its improving at least a little and it may be being betaed soon i have my fingers crossed about that thanks for the review i will try to keep what you said in mind while writing future chapters
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All right I think this is starting to pickup. I'm glad that there was a little Victor in that chapter. As a suggestion to make things easier on your readers, please separate into a separate paragraph when someone else starts talking rather then have an entire conversation in one paragraph. Thank you. So is this the year of the triwizard tournament? and Is Buffy Xander and Willow going to be going to an American school of Witchcraft and wizardry or is something going to happen to send them to Hogwarts? OOh Will Willow and a Weasley be getting together? and will there be a pairing for Xander? Really looking forward to the Buffy victor stuff.

thanks ive been trying to do that
yes there basically going to go in a warp time where they will get caught up and then they will go to Salem for two month's then off to Hogwarts as for pairings there will be Cordy/Angel eventually i may have willow and xander go on a date.
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Interesting ideas, and I like the way the story 3ways in each chapter so far.

Please double check your spelling, grammar, and formatting. If you are not comfortable having a friend review your work then reading out loud to yourself may help. For instance, when you were writing the school letters and the individual commentary the sentences ran together leading to some confusion as to which was which. While this sort of thing does not prevent the reading and comprehension of your work, it does make it a little bit harder to enjoy as much as it deserves.

thank you for pointing that out there wont be as many thoughts in the coming chapters mostly buffys later on
Thanks for the review
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Wow a Buffy, Victor story that is one I haven't read before. I am looking forward to reading more. I am looking forward to finding out what house they will be in, also what will their wands be made of and stuff. Oh and will Angel try to get between Buffy and Victor when things start heating up between them?

First of all Thanks the houses might be mixed from what you would normally think.the wands are giving me a bit of trouble i want them to be unique that is a possibility nothing is really set in stone yet besides Buffy/Viktor ending up together any and all suggestions are welcomed if you give me an idea you get credit for it